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		<title>Let me clear my throat</title>
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		<pubDate>Tue, 18 Mar 2008 17:29:52 +0000</pubDate>
		<dc:creator>Christine</dc:creator>
				<category><![CDATA[Blog: words and web]]></category>
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		<description><![CDATA[I wrote stories as a kid and a diary in my teens. Then, I trained as a journalist. When I began to write exclusively for web I found that factual writing meant stripping down layers of unnecessary words and &#8216;throat clearing&#8217;. Throat clearing goes like this: &#8220;At a time of desperate global economy worries, many [...]]]></description>
			<content:encoded><![CDATA[<p>I wrote stories as a kid and a diary in my teens. Then, I trained as a journalist. When I began to write exclusively for web I found that factual writing meant stripping down layers of unnecessary words and &#8216;throat clearing&#8217;.</p>
<p>Throat clearing goes like this: &#8220;At a time of desperate global economy worries, many homeowners are facing financial meltdown as they struggle to meet with the increasing cost of living.&#8221;</p>
<p>Now read the sentence again starting at &#8220;many&#8221;. It still says the same thing doesn&#8217;t it?</p>
<p>I don&#8217;t like waffling on. I don&#8217;t want someone&#8217;s opinion on whether an interviewee &#8216;sighed&#8217; or &#8216;seethed&#8217;. They just &#8216;said&#8217;. Stop getting in the way of the story and give it to me straight. I&#8217;m a big girl, I can take it.</p>
<p>So here are a couple of rules I&#8217;ve picked up along the way which I&#8217;d like to share with you:</p>
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<li>People &#8216;say&#8217; or &#8216;said&#8217;. Nothing else</li>
<li>&#8216;Inverted pyramid&#8217; writing applies wholeheartedly to web &#8211; give me the who, what, where, why and how, then the quotes, then the background</li>
<li>Keep to one clause per sentence if possible</li>
<li>If your sentence sounds/means the same with any words or clauses taken out &#8211; take them out!</li>
<li>Limit your adverbs. Did he menacingly look, or did he look?</li>
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<p><em>This post was originally published by Christine on Tue, 03/18/2008</em></p>
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